The Desolate Lighthouse

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George was standing alone on the backyard veranda of their summer house in Bald Head Island of America. He was sad, detached from life and totally affected by his mother’s sudden death. Suddenly, he looked at the abandoned lighthouse standing alone in the deserted corner of the island, just like him. He remembered his childhood days when he, along with his parents used of come there in every vacation and visited the lighthouse and spent a lot of time. Coming back to the present, he all of a sudden, saw his father, mother and himself enjoying with each other and revisiting their lost life.



This post is written for this week's Five Sentence Fiction-Desolate

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  1. I liked it. :-) The only thing that struck me odd was the "Suddenly, he looked...". I would phrase it so that it wasn't the looking itself that was sudden, but rather the realization of the metaphor.

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    1. Thank you so much for stating your opinion, David. Next time I'll do it flawless. It was my first time, though, I shouldn't excuse myself. Thanks again!

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  2. Short and Nice...Very well written..I liked reading it,and as David pointed out the mistake..I want to say practice makes you better and day by day you will better

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  3. Memories are priceless and you have utilized it the best possible way...!!!

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  4. I like how you turned the image to a happy memory/time and away from his despair. Beautifully written. xx

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  5. memoirs .. what else is past .. captured as a glimpse or two ..somewhere in the mind .. shows up suddenly ..when rather most needed.. thats all gone by time is about ... deserted we stand .. still so much content .. in the presence of old times !!
    abandoned buildings and abandoned life speak the same language of solitary .. !! Aptly expressed Shayantani !!

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  6. What a beautiful, emotion filled story.

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  7. So much emotion in just five lines...I could never do that! <3

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  8. Wonderful - it was so good to see that he was able to enjoy happy memories in the midst of his sorrow.

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  9. Nice capture showing the beauti of the nature and its creation.

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  10. Going down the memory lane can be relaxing at times !!!

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