The Desolate Lighthouse
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George was standing alone on the backyard veranda of their summer
house in Bald Head Island of America. He was sad, detached from life and
totally affected by his mother’s sudden death. Suddenly, he looked at the
abandoned lighthouse standing alone in the deserted corner of the island, just
like him. He remembered his childhood days when he, along with his parents used
of come there in every vacation and visited the lighthouse and spent a lot of
time. Coming back to the present, he all of a sudden, saw his father, mother
and himself enjoying with each other and revisiting their lost life.
This post is written for this week's Five Sentence Fiction-Desolate
I liked it. :-) The only thing that struck me odd was the "Suddenly, he looked...". I would phrase it so that it wasn't the looking itself that was sudden, but rather the realization of the metaphor.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for stating your opinion, David. Next time I'll do it flawless. It was my first time, though, I shouldn't excuse myself. Thanks again!
DeleteShort and Nice...Very well written..I liked reading it,and as David pointed out the mistake..I want to say practice makes you better and day by day you will better
ReplyDeleteYeah, thanks for the comment :)
DeleteMemories are priceless and you have utilized it the best possible way...!!!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Anjan :)
DeleteI like how you turned the image to a happy memory/time and away from his despair. Beautifully written. xx
ReplyDeletewow
ReplyDeletememoirs .. what else is past .. captured as a glimpse or two ..somewhere in the mind .. shows up suddenly ..when rather most needed.. thats all gone by time is about ... deserted we stand .. still so much content .. in the presence of old times !!
ReplyDeleteabandoned buildings and abandoned life speak the same language of solitary .. !! Aptly expressed Shayantani !!
Interesting
ReplyDeleteNicely composed indeed....
ReplyDeleteWhat a beautiful, emotion filled story.
ReplyDeleteSo much emotion in just five lines...I could never do that! <3
ReplyDeleteWonderful - it was so good to see that he was able to enjoy happy memories in the midst of his sorrow.
ReplyDeleteNice capture showing the beauti of the nature and its creation.
ReplyDeleteGoing down the memory lane can be relaxing at times !!!
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