I
Love
The secret
Lanes of love.
Amble dreamily in the
labyrinths,
But still found no
way to the exit.
And no escape from
the maze, to boot.
I tramp and make
strides,
Long weary route,
Till conclusion.
Unknown,
Unsolved...
***
This time I tried my hands on a Fibonacci or Fib. This is a form of poetry inspired by the Fibonacci series in mathematics, where, the first line contains 1 syllable, the second, 1 syllable (the sum of 0 and 1) the third, 2 syllables (sum of lines 1 and 2) the fourth, 3 syllables (sum of lines 2 and 3) the fifth, 5 syllables (sum of lines 3 and 4) the final line, 8 syllables (sum of lines 4 and 5) ending with a six line, 20 syllable poem all told. But, I here, used a word count instead of a syllable count. I am no expert in this. So, forgive me for any mistake and please give suggestions. Have you tried this form ever?
I dont set much store by specific forms.but I liked the poem.even those who have been in love for years remain puzzled by its endless riddles.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for liking this Abin :)
DeleteAwesome loved it Saya :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Radha!
DeleteA sense of perserverance and mystery here--thanks for participating in our challenge at The Garden.
ReplyDeleteI am grateful to you that you brought me this opportunity to learn a form of poetry! Thanks for your comment :)
DeleteGreat fib, with intriguing content. I like the dreamy ambling in lanes that become a labyrinth. That's the way of love, for sure!
ReplyDeleteThanks Sherry, it's great to hear from you :)
DeleteWow..loved the poem...
ReplyDeleteI remember fibonacci series ....:):)
Thanks Tejinder di. Uff maths has been such a pain for me!
Deletereally cool form... I love the flow between these two lines "And no escape from the maze, to boot.
ReplyDeleteI tramp and make strides"
Thank you so much Laura! This means a lot to me :)
DeleteWell done. I must try one of these. Loved the sneakers.
ReplyDeletesomewhat of a mystery...
ReplyDeleteWow that's awesome..I programmed on Fibonacci during my Engg days and never knew that this series used for writing poems as well..
ReplyDeleteWell Done.. :-)
loved it, will try my hand at a fib too, nice idea!
ReplyDeleteQuite creative one!
ReplyDeleteWoW1 Good one for a start!
ReplyDeleteNice write :)
ReplyDeleteGood one, Sayantini! Must try my hand at a fib soon :)
ReplyDeleteGod, they are coming up with new new forms. I already lived in fear of haikos, now this. Good try
ReplyDeletecool fib....love is def a journey we dont know the end of but the commitment to go to that end, that to me is what is important....thanks for sharing it with dverse as well....
ReplyDeletebrilliant... :)
ReplyDeleteWow. Well done. I never knew that such a form even existed. :)
ReplyDeletebeautifully crafted emotions. Lovely.
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